Writing Task 2 · Two-part question

Commercialisation of traditional festivals: IELTS Writing Task 2 sample answer

An IELTS Writing Task 2 two-part question essay question with a Band 8-style sample answer, the plan behind it, the vocabulary that lifts it and what an examiner looks for.
  • 299 words
  • Two-part question
  • General Training
  • 40 minutes

The question

Many traditional festivals have become more about shopping and spending money than about their original meaning. Why has this happened? Is this a positive or negative development?

About 40 minutes. Write at least 250 words.

Two-part question

Plan before you write

  1. 1

    Your position

    Several factors explain the change, and although it brings economic benefits, it is mainly negative.

  2. 2

    Paragraph 2

    Businesses, advertising and social media promote spending, while original customs lose meaning in more secular societies.

  3. 3

    Paragraph 3

    Spending helps retailers, but it creates financial pressure and weakens the values festivals were meant to express.

  • →Answer both questions directly and develop each answer.
  • →One useful structure is a body paragraph for each question, using clear topic sentences and relevant support.
  • →Check that neither requested part is omitted or replaced with an answer to a different question.

Model answer

Band 8-style sample essay

This AI-generated teaching example illustrates target features; it has not received an official IELTS band. Compare its ideas and structure with your own response.

Band 8-style model299 words · use the structure and vocabulary, not the sentences

In many countries, traditional festivals that were once centred on religion, family or the changing seasons are now associated with special offers, gifts and decorations. Several factors explain this change, and although it brings some economic benefits, I believe it is mainly a negative development.

The main reason for this shift is that businesses have recognised festivals as valuable opportunities to increase sales. Shops begin advertising festive products weeks in advance, and the media repeatedly suggest that a celebration is incomplete without new clothes, expensive presents or elaborate food. Social media has intensified this pressure, as people share images of their purchases and celebrations, which can make others feel they must spend more to keep up. In addition, as societies become more secular and families more scattered, the original customs of some festivals have lost their meaning for younger generations, leaving consumption to fill the gap.

There are some positive aspects. Festival spending supports retailers, restaurants and small producers, many of whom rely on these periods for a large share of their annual income. The excitement of shopping and decorating can also create a cheerful atmosphere that brings communities together.

However, the drawbacks are more serious. Families on low incomes may feel obliged to spend money they do not have, sometimes falling into debt to meet expectations. More importantly, when a festival is reduced to consumption, the values it was intended to express, such as gratitude, generosity and reflection, are easily forgotten. Children may grow up seeing a celebration only as an occasion to receive gifts rather than as part of their cultural heritage.

In conclusion, festivals have become commercialised because businesses and social media promote spending while traditional meanings fade. Despite the economic benefits, I regard this as negative because it creates financial pressure and weakens cultural values.

Model commentary

Features to notice in this model

This response aims to illustrate Band 8 features by answering both questions and giving a clear evaluation supported by reasons on each side. The argument is logically sequenced, and vocabulary such as 'secular' and 'intensified' is used precisely within a variety of complex sentences.

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Vocabulary from the essay

  • elaborate

    detailed and complicated, often expensive

  • intensified

    made stronger or more extreme

  • secular

    not connected with religion

  • scattered

    spread over a wide area

  • consumption

    the act of buying and using goods

  • obliged

    feeling that you have to do something

  • heritage

    traditions and culture passed down from the past

More words for this topic: IELTS vocabulary for culture and tradition.

Frequently asked questions

What type of essay is "Commercialisation of traditional festivals"?+

Two-part question. Answer both questions directly and develop each answer.

How many words should an IELTS Writing Task 2 essay be?+

At least 250 words, in about 40 minutes. This sample is 299 words, written to fit that time with five minutes left to check grammar.

How is IELTS Writing Task 2 scored?+

On four criteria: task response, coherence and cohesion, vocabulary, and grammatical range and accuracy. Task 2 counts for twice as much as Task 1 in your Writing band.

What is the difference between a Band 6 and a Band 8 answer here?+

This response aims to illustrate Band 8 features by answering both questions and giving a clear evaluation supported by reasons on each side. The argument is logically sequenced, and vocabulary such as 'secular' and 'intensified' is used precisely within a variety of complex sentences.

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